Ok, I've worked a lot on my opening. I've gotten the prologue down to 4 pages. I introduced Ash in a way I think shows a good "before" portrait of him and his needs that will allow the "after" picture I'll soon write to stand in great relief. I aimed to write him as a good-hearted person who likes to please and who is quite vulnerable emotionally, needy. I show the holes in his marriage, but also end the most recently finished chapter on a note that shows a portrait of what their good times look like when they agree to look for a house. I introduced his wife Ginny in a way that I hope shows her as as someone searching for meaning in her life, something she had but lost. I'm almost to my first temptation for Ash. I've already written it, but I have a transition to make. A chapter that shows how they can go form that high point when they decide to look for a house, back down to low enough in Ash's confidence that he can be vulnerable to temptation, needing attention.
Driving today, I had a thought of bringing Miazy in in her POV. I hadn't planned on that til December, and it's still summer. But maybe it'd be good to bring her in. Maybe in that chapter I can make passing reference to her observation of an event between Ash and Ginny that the reader can know makes him lose confidence in Ginny. I think it'd be fun to find Maizy's older voice. I haven't written her yet, other than in the prologue. Maybe it'd be really good for the story to bring her in now, in Ash's "before" portrait.
Ok, I've decided: my task tonight is to write a Maizy chapter. I want her voice to be rich, to reveal observations of her world. She's the artist, after all--if anyone's got powers of observation it should be her. Also, I hope to show, eventually at least, that Maizy of the prologue was not a trustworthy POV. I want to show how strong she is now in comparison.
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